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Narrative Essay: The Wrong Bus — v3

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Ming En Ong

Content: To begin with, technology has quietly rewritten the rules of friendship, study, and family life. In conclusion, a balanced approach serves us best.
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Paolo dela Cruz	Your description leans on sight alone. Bring in sound and smell as we practised in class, and cut the narrative detour in paragraph three.	Argument / ContentOrganisation / Structure	Aug 21, 2024