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Narrative Essay: The Wrong Bus — v1

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Jun Kai Sim

Content: In today's world, it is increasingly clear that students face mounting pressure to perform, and this shapes how they spend every hour after school. With better planning, the outcome could have been different.
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Paolo dela Cruz	The content is on-topic but your paragraphs need clearer topic sentences. Each paragraph should carry one idea; yours often carry two or three.	Organisation / Structure	Sep 28, 2024